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(Contains: strong language)
You called me a ‘slut’
When I said ‘no’.

You called me a ‘bitch’
For smiling at other people.

You called me ‘smart’
(For a blonde girl).

You called me ‘dumb’
When I said ‘I love you.’

You called me a ‘piece of ass’
To your friends.

You called me a ‘princess’
In front of mine.

You called me ‘easy’
Because of my clothes.

You called me ‘frigid’
For not screwing you.

You called me your ‘woman’
When I was by your side.

You called me a ‘girl’
When I chose to leave.

You were my ‘world’
When you were tearing it down.

You became nothing
When I saw that's what I was to you.
Short and crappy but there you have it. 
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Briannabater Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2014  Professional Photographer
Well done!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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BEartistic121212 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
MY MY.....DEEP SHIT.... NO TROLL ELLIE... THIS IS REAL *empties a revolver in ur honor* MAY I SAY BRAVVVVOOOO... A FANTASTIC PIECE OF REALISTIC ART :iconmnrthumbsupplz: 
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Flameboy007 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014
( T_T)\(^-^ )
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otherland78 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014
i guess that really happened to you ? :-(

but the poem is touching in a sad way
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Ninjawhovian Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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Da-Numb-Heart Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
M god. I relate to his so well. Complete respect and love to you, CorporateRockWhore :heart:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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Da-Numb-Heart Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :hug: I usually have a hard time finding excellent literary writers I can relate to so well :)
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luckylady74 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014
You became, and are nothing, when  you revealed your true self. Not the lie I lived with for years. I was not in love with "you".  But a caricature of you, that you manipulated me into believing was real. Bravo. Academy Award to goes to...... CorporateRockWhore
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BEartistic121212 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014
DEAR "luckylady74" u shudnt have left urself open LIKE THIS...... NOW I CAN TRACK U :D
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Short, but not crappy. I would call it raw, sharp.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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Crystal-Magic13 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime.
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DrCrazyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful!!!! Just beautiful!!!!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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DrCrazyWolf Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
^_^
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baka-espada Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
its not short and crappy!!! its beautiful :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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TheresNoSuchThing24 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist
Like a lot of your work, this really rings true, and thank you for picking up especially on the pressure on girls today to have sex and still somehow be innocent for fear of being shamed as a 'slut'
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's hard; if a girl hasn't had sex, she gets labelled 'frigid' or a 'prude', but if she has had it, she's a 'slut'. You can't win. 
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SundaeBunny Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student General Artist
This is fantastic, I know how it feels to be in a shitty relationship. Hang in there :heart:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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SundaeBunny Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Student General Artist
Of course ^o^
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Mialily333 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
its not crappy!! its amazing, most of these apply to me anyway and i loved it so there..
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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Mialily333 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome xxBear Emoji-16 (Clapping Encore Applause) [V1] 
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lovemondotrasho Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think this is crappy at all (and I'm sure most of the people commenting would agree with me). I think the rough edges to your words make it a lot more meaningful. All of us can envision ourselves in this kind of situation one way or another. It's easier to be blunt about it than to be flowery with it because specific and harsh words appeal more to our senses than something we have to interpret.

I hope all of that made sense; I'm surprised I can form coherent sentences. Constantly studying for the SAT does not do well for my sanity. D:

Again, I am in love with your endings. There is just something about them that leaves me speechless every time.

You always blow me away with your writing! New deviations from you honestly make my day.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!

I empathise with you; I'm currently revising for my A2 exams, the first of which is in nineteen days. I wish you the best of luck with your SATs. :)

Thank you very much for being so lovely! :glomp:
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Shadowfane2019 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014
Short yes, crappy no. I like the style, and I think the length is actually a benefit to the poem. It almost makes it seem like you only took that crap so long before you said 'screw you' and walked away. Its empowering I love it. :hug:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm glad you liked it! :D
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Shadowfane2019 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014
You're welcome. Congrats on 2000 watchers! *is proud to be one* :glomp:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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BatflashIsMyDrug Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student General Artist
This was great. I seriously cannot comprehend how one person can have so much talent. It baffles me ;D
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you! :hug:
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LadyNoiraile Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
As many of those who commented before me I don't consider this crappy at all. On the contrary, this is yet again one of my favourites. I ike how it seems rather rough and unpolished, very much like the way thoughts just come to mind as one reflects on a past relationship. Maybe you could have "built up" the emotion a bit more, starting with some more "innocent" memories (such as being called "smart" or "princess") than with the very aggressive, negative "slut" line in order to give the poem more structure and direction, but then again, this more random order of memories also has this nice connection to the loose, confusing associations our mind sometimes makes when we remember things.
What I really love about the poem is the final statement. Shifting the activity from the ex-partner to the writer her/himself it adds some extra impact to the very powerful line... just gorgeous! :heart: The last four stanzas, starting with "You called me your 'woman'", nicely work up to that and really drew me in.
Good job altogether, keep it up! :clap:


PS: On a side note, I do wish that the poem was written out of artistic inspiration rather than due to something you had to experience yourself. However, if the latter is true, I wish you all the strength the person in the poem posesses to make it through this utterly shitty situation. I know it can be hard to be as strong and brave as your own art, but I'm wishing you the very best with it. Huggle! 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :glomp:

I agree with you; I should have built it up more. My problem is that I'm an impatient writer (I'll spend a maximum of fifteen minutes or there abouts on a poem) and I don't really spend too much time on the structure, which is an issue that I'm trying to work on. 

It is written from personal experience, but that relationship was nearly a year ago now. Thank you very much. :hug:
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thegirlwithagun Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
that's... relatable, though I've never been in a relationship before.
I'm weird, but still...
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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CanadianDoktor Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
So I was reading and commented on this and the comment ended up on haunted :/

anyway I like this very much it's good and realistic! :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm glad you liked it! :D
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CanadianDoktor Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
You're most welcome :D
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Bbburn Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
It's really good! It's funny, you can almost use it backwards too. 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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Sinsoffate Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014
if you ever need a shoulder to cry on just wnat to talk
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student General Artist
Hmmm, I'm sorry that you had to deal and go through something like this (if thats the case)
It's revolting how disgusting some people can be to others, makes you sick.
But lovely poem, raw and straight-up truth.
<3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Student General Artist
Hug Heart 
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