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Dear Loneliness,
Will you be my friend?
Because I seem to just be a trend,
That the world has put to bed.

Dear Sorrow,
Will you make me smile?
Because Happiness has run a mile,
Just like everything else I need.

Dear Pessimism,
Will you help me hope?
Because Optimism is a slippery slope,
When you've seen the world.

Dear Apathy,
Will you make me care?
Because I hate Interest's flare,
In a place too dull for life.

Dear Agony,
Will you make me content?
Because you're the one that'll prevent,
That which I long for.

Dear Death,
Will you make me feel alive?
Because I don't even want to survive,
In a world that cares too much.

Dear Hell,
Will you make me a saint?
Because I don't deserve a heavenly taint,
Due to the sinner that I have become.

Dear Friends,
Will you make me your sob-story?
Because you want all of the pride and glory,
Of surviving where your buddy fell.
Please let me know what you think/how to improve.
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What on Earth do you mean, 'improve'? This is so beautifully written! And it's really clever the way the second line of each verse seems to contradict the first and... it's just really beautiful xD
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you very much! :glomp:
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! xD:huggle:
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alienchief Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Student Writer
 I wouldn't change a damn thing about it... This poem is great !
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!! :D
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ChaosIsAwakening Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I am in love with this poem, so very well written!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!! :D
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ScienceNerdArt399 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are amazing, this poem is just wow, I'm speechless. Good work!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very, very much! :)
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ForgottenHalcyonDays Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Student Writer
Wow thats an excellent poem, no need for improvements but the theme is interesting and very well written. Keep it up!
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