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Life is a ghost,
When you're dead inside.
Trust me;
I'm as dead
As a person can be.

Without light,
It's so dark at night.
It's too true;
Without hope,
Where are you?

Have you ever felt too dead to live?
Too far empty to give?
Too broken to forgive?
Have you ever felt too worthless to try?
Too down deep low to fly?
Too small to reach the sky?

Don't be like me;
Too dead to live,
Too empty to give,
Too broken to forgive.
Don't be like them;
Too worthless to try,
Too low to fly.
You can reach the sky.

Don't be Them or Me
Or Him or She.
Just be You
Because you're not dead,
Control your head;
Don't let them
Make your bed.

Go out and live,
Receive and give,
Learn to forgive.
Always try,
Because you can fly,
You can reach the sky.

Yeah.
You can reach the sky.
Do it for me;
For someone too not free
To try.

You can reach the sky.
Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think! :)
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:iconmilkywayfrequence:
MilkyWayFrequence Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012
Oh my gosh, it's very beautiful, I love it ^^ You just made happier my day :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much! And your comment just made my day happier. :D
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:iconmilkywayfrequence:
MilkyWayFrequence Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
OHHH A new day, a new happier day :P
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Rhys1010 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Very good poetry.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :)
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Rhys1010 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
No problem.
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Karen-chanOVERDRIVE Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
I like this one, but:

"Have you ever felt too dead to live?
Too empty to give?
Too broken to forgive?
Have you ever felt too worthless to try?
Too low to fly?
Too small to reach the sky?"

for this stanza, if you made lines three and six equal in syllables to lines two and five then it would flow a little better.

And I like the last line.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks; I'll go try to fix it. :)
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