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I saw something in the mirror today that kinda creeped me out.
It was a girl wearing a smile, not a frown nor a pout.

Her eyes were wide and shining, just as a summer sun.
Her laugh wasn't wooden and fake, but true and full of fun.

Her irises reflected happiness, not a trace of pain.
She was under perfect skies; not a drop of rain.

Angels swam around her, keeping the devil at bay.
Her life was precious and she wasn't throwing it away.

Her lips were red and shinging with a pure smile.
It was a sight her mirror hadn't seen in a very long while.

She wasn't at all pretty but a care she did not give.
Because today she woke up and said, "Today I am going to live."
I know it's kinda short, but I sort of like this one; it was fun to write and different to my normal style.

Thank you very much for reading and please let me know what you think! :)
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I must say, this is my favorite out of all the poems You have made so far. It was sO fUll of beAuty, that I felt shiveRs running up and down my back.

ThE only thing I didn't like was 'shinging', but I completely ignored it the first time over it was so Awesome.

Ma'aM, you Are BRILLIANT. At the Zenith of my feelings for thIs poem, I was stupefied. This coNveyed exactly what I LOVE to hear. This wasn't Good, this was great!

Now, go back and read the out of place capitalized letters. I think you'll enjoy it.
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Xerxesia Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist
THIS IS BEAUTIFUUULLL
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Bandfangirl4life Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
You're An AMAZING Poet :0000
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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Bandfangirl4life Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
You're welcome ;333 Wink/Razz Torchic 
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IceKeys-Love Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
... no words. Beautiful... :,)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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SerenityStars Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I swear this is the most refreshing piece of poetry I've read in my entire life. It.. it just feels like a chilly breeze slapping you right on the face- in a good way, of course. :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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RainbowSofie Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Why you so good at poetry? Every single piece touches me and (together with the right music) makes me feel like I'm floating in a lake of emotion. It feels amazing <3
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