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I saw something in the mirror today that kinda creeped me out.
It was a girl wearing a smile, not a frown nor a pout.

Her eyes were wide and shining, just as a summer sun.
Her laugh wasn't wooden and fake, but true and full of fun.

Her irises reflected happiness, not a trace of pain.
She was under perfect skies; not a drop of rain.

Angels swam around her, keeping the devil at bay.
Her life was precious and she wasn't throwing it away.

Her lips were red and shinging with a pure smile.
It was a sight her mirror hadn't seen in a very long while.

She wasn't at all pretty but a care she did not give.
Because today she woke up and said, "Today I am going to live."
I know it's kinda short, but I sort of like this one; it was fun to write and different to my normal style.

Thank you very much for reading and please let me know what you think! :)
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:iconiamtheverybadartist:
I must say, this is my favorite out of all the poems You have made so far. It was sO fUll of beAuty, that I felt shiveRs running up and down my back.

ThE only thing I didn't like was 'shinging', but I completely ignored it the first time over it was so Awesome.

Ma'aM, you Are BRILLIANT. At the Zenith of my feelings for thIs poem, I was stupefied. This coNveyed exactly what I LOVE to hear. This wasn't Good, this was great!

Now, go back and read the out of place capitalized letters. I think you'll enjoy it.
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Kalusonyatagami890 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
wow put a smile on my face ur better than me in every way dang
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LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
9th line- shinging, should be either singing or shining.
(I just now noticed this, reading the poem for the 5th time.)
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LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
This... this is great. :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely no problem at all. :)
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GodsAngelGG Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Professional General Artist
This is my all time favorite (by you) it expresses perfectly how affective it is and good it feels to actually feel alive, afer being brough down, pretending its okay, the ryhmes were just beautiful, and the wording was just right. 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! :glomp:
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GodsAngelGG Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Professional General Artist
your welcome :D
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Xerxesia Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist
THIS IS BEAUTIFUUULLL
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Bandfangirl4life Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
You're An AMAZING Poet :0000
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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Bandfangirl4life Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
You're welcome ;333 Wink/Razz Torchic 
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:iconicekeys-love:
IceKeys-Love Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
... no words. Beautiful... :,)
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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SerenityStars Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I swear this is the most refreshing piece of poetry I've read in my entire life. It.. it just feels like a chilly breeze slapping you right on the face- in a good way, of course. :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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RainbowSofie Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Why you so good at poetry? Every single piece touches me and (together with the right music) makes me feel like I'm floating in a lake of emotion. It feels amazing <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, but I'm not good at poetry at all! 

Thanks for being so lovely! :hug:
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RainbowSofie Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yes you are
just  a quick look at my poetry for example clearly shows how good you are

<3
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The11thNightfall Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can see the pictures you paint with your words. It's beautiful. ^w^ Thank you for sharing.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :hug:
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:iconthe11thnightfall:
The11thNightfall Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! ^w^ :hug:
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BluTiger07 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Beautiful 
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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BluTiger07 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
WelcomesHeart 
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:iconrunningwire:
RunningWire Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Student General Artist
You have a really great writing style, I'm glad I found your work. 
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JinxtheShadowyHero Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
This is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever seen
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2014
This is truly beautiful.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :hug:
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014
You're welcome.
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wolfdino8 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This has happened a lot to me but its nice for a change when it does happen
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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darkwolf227 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
This happened to me a few times..
I caught a glimpse of myself smiling in the mirror and it actually scared me. :hug: :heart:
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ValentineRevenge Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hon, seeing yourself smile shouldn't creep ya out :hug:
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know, I do look like a psycho when I smile! ;P
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ValentineRevenge Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
O.O Hon, the pictures of you I've seen, you're really fucking cute. Meaning, too cute to look psycho when you smile. (And don't go taking that as me being rude towards you, I don't mean it as rude. I mean it as a compliment.)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Pirate-Yashimaru Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Professional General Artist
very well done. i actually found you through he lovely sidebar of "you might like these if you like this" on my own poem of this nature. i kinda like your better. it is simpler and in it's simplicity it says all that needs to be said and does so beautifully.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! :hug:
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Pirate-Yashimaru Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Professional General Artist
any time.
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miraslava Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
I really like it. This piece brings hope.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; glad you liked it! :D
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Sketchesbyme Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Student Digital Artist
BEAUTIFUL :icontearsplz:
Reminds me of someone....
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconcrysforever: SO proud of you
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Shaderovi Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist
"Today I am going to live." Omg, that line. :icontearfulplz:
I've not been feeling very... "well", if I can put it like that, in the last few weeks. But reading this has lift up my spirits. I don't know how you do it, but your writing always touch me really deep. Thank you so much!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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tylerp1991 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ey well written and cool message
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