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If I could play guitar
I’d write you a song.
If I could run that far
Then I’d run all night long.
But I’m no good at that
So you’ll have to settle for this.

What is this?

It's a plea
A beg
For you
From me
Please come home
I'm all alone
And nobody understands.

I don't want you to R.I.P.
I want you here with me
But I'm not God
And He hates me
So, for now,
I guess it's R.I.P.
Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think. :)
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netherworldsnowlady Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanx again...You've got me working on my own old scraps of writing!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, you're welcome; thank you!
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Karen-chanOVERDRIVE Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
I love it.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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GreenDeath1998 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. It's just...wow. Amazing.

And I'm crying...
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you; I'm very glad you like it! :)

:hug:
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Perfection273 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student General Artist
omfg
i was already sad and this isn't helping...
you know it's perfect when I almost randomly start crying sitting at my computer...
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry it didn't help with your sadness! :icontardglompplz:
Thanks! :)
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Kthejaybee3 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love the beggining :3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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CheeseLovingChester Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think I get what it's about... It really is wonderful <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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LibraryTechChick Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"If I could play guitar
I’d write you a song.
If I could run that far
Then I’d run all night long.
But I’m no good at that
So you’ll have to settle for this."

The beginning stanza grabs your attention immediately. Great work! I would be interested to see you add an equally evocative stanza at the end.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I'll try my best to come up with another, similar stanza for the ending.

Thanks for commenting! :D
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LibraryTechChick Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, you're welcome. Constructive feedback is always helpful, at least to me, and I'm trying to get more active on the site.
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