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I'm just that fat kid
Starved of hope.
I'm just that cutter
Reaching for rope.

I'm just that dumb blonde
Reading all night.
I'm just that coward
Bleeding for a fright.

I'm just that child
Without care.
I'm just that girl
With messy hair.

I'm just that burner
Wanting to be cool.
I'm just that geek
Scared of school.

I'm just that emo
Smiling with glee.
You're just another drone
But you'll never be me.
Please let me know what you think :)
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DeWubz Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2015  New Deviant Student Traditional Artist
This made me feel like i could smile once. I mean I couldn't because my mouth muscles have deteriorated since i've never used them (just kidding) But amazing poem really good job.
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UniqueStrangeAwesome Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Scarily original. I haven't even thought of some of these! 0.O
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LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Here- have a hug for a job well done.Hug 
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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LuvLuvDarkness Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Huggle! Man Hug 5 seconds hug Tackling hug :hug: :hug :hug:2 rvmp
HUGZ 4 EVERY1
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TheAwkwardFangirl Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This mirrors how my mind feels. This poem hasn't completely placated me, but I'm glad there's someone out there who understands. :D
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HK-0391 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014   Digital Artist
:iconcryforeverplz:
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:iconflamingodancer123:
flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
I really love it my friend, so many emotions, so much confusion, but that glimmer of hope even though it doesn't seem so. I do so love your work!!!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm really glad you liked it! :hug:
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:iconflamingodancer123:
flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
I did, very much so!!!
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:iconmythgirl61:
mythgirl61 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I love this poem so much! It's amazing how I can read your poems and feel the emotions and see me in them. You're a great writer.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :iconunicornglompplz:
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:iconzamadness:
zamadness Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
This was a very good poem and it made me think for a while. Wow great job
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much! :hug:
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MoonKunai Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So very simple,
and so very true.
We are what we are.
And that is what we will be.

Because this is for you,
as much as it is for me.
We are amazing.
We are unique.
And for that,
we will never truly be beat.

;)
You kick arse with your lines, girl.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like your reply poem there; very clever! :hug:

Aw, thank you very much! :glomp:
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:iconmoonkunai:
MoonKunai Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Inspiration strikes where it it strikes. ^^; Thanks.

Haha, you're welcome. =)
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Alexisnotominous Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
GOOD!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Perfection273 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student General Artist
wow
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Adewdewk Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Amazing, it left me breathless! Such emotion!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you very much! :)
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:iconadewdewk:
Adewdewk Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
No probs
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Kiliann Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Writer
I can relate to this poem so well!
You've done a great job with this. It evokes a lot of emotion from people who feel like they're "just" someone.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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:iconkiliann:
Kiliann Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Writer
:iconspazhugplz:
You're welcome! ^^
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justfate Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
THAT WOULD MAKE A BLOODY GOOD SONG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1111111111111!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111111111
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thanks ;P
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Taleigh-Rae Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I really like this. It flows well. I like the emotion behind it. :)
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; glad you liked it :D
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that was amazing, with a lot of emotion poured into it
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome! :]
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LustfulDevil Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013   Writer
Very nice poem
could feel the emotion
great job
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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LustfulDevil Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013   Writer
you are very welcome:D
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ArtesArcana Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! :D
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thanks! :glomp:
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Leathurkatt-TFTiggy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
From Tiggy's mom,
Nice, we all wear masks that most never bother to see beneath - and some put up a wall so that no one can see at all because they are afraid of judgement or rejection. But we are all more alike than we are different! Keep writing.
Marce
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I agree with you; a lot of people hide who they are because they feared being judged/rejected when actually, we're a lot more similar than we think.

Thanks for commenting! :)
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Leathurkatt-TFTiggy Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. I am truly touched by this. It describes many of today's youth. More people need to see this poem because it is true. You did an amazing job with this.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you very, very much! I started writing it to describe myself, but along the way I kinda tried to make it more universal than personal, if that makes sense.

Thank you for being so nice about my poem! :hug:
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HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That makes perfect sense! I pride you on your way to universalize poetry. It will take you far. Also you are welcome. I give compliments where compliments are deserved. Keep on writing. :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thanks again! :hug:
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:iconheartlesstales:
HeartlessTales Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're so welcome! :)
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pollyholly Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
That s me
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You and I both, then. :hug:
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:iconpollyholly:
pollyholly Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Yeah
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