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Don't call me childish,
When you treat me like a child.
Don't call me crazy,
When you drive me wild.

Don't ask me for help,
When you've left me to drown.
Don't ask me to smile,
When you've made me frown.

Don't make me fight,
When you can't defend.
Don't make me be honest,
When you can't pretend.

Don't tell me to dream,
When you're my nightmare.
Don't damn me to hell,
When you're my only prayer.

Do save yourself;
It's too late for me.
Do ignore the rules;
For me, set yourself free.
This is definitely not my best, but y'know.

Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think.
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:icontalentlessartlover:
TalentlessArtlover Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Until you're dead, it's [link] :)
And who's to say that, even then, it is? :meditate:
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Gotta love a good bit of Three Days Grace. :iconrockonplz:
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:icontalentlessartlover:
TalentlessArtlover Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Indeed. :D
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mayorofunkytown Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
It's an interesting back and forth. Originally it left me with a sense of hopelessness, but after looking at the last line again I reinterpreted everything in a somewhat more positive way.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm glad the positive aspects of it got through in the end. :)
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:iconbittersweetwanderer:
BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I might use this as lyrics for my band. With your permission, of course!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, I'm very flattered but I'm gonna have to ask you not to. I'm in a band myself and so pretty much everything I write gets put into that. Sorry. :hug:

Thanks though! :D
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:iconbittersweetwanderer:
BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay! It's fine!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconad08star:
ad08star Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
its really interesting... Sometimes or somewhere we do feel that way... (atleast i do ) :)
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks; I'm glad you find it interesting. And I think we all do too, it's just a part of life. :)
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:iconwolfskater63:
WolfSkater63 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Interesting
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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:iconwolfskater63:
WolfSkater63 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
You're welcome
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:icongravity-bolt:
Gravity-bolt Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's okay it happens to almost everyone
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconiamjustasecret:
IAmJustASecret Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
named
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:iconiamjustasecret:
IAmJustASecret Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are a lost friend
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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:iconiamjustasecret:
IAmJustASecret Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah!
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:iconarkanan13:
arkanan13 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
i really like this
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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:iconarkanan13:
arkanan13 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
you're welcome
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:icondontmindmyname:
dontMindmyName Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Wow. This is great!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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dontMindmyName Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
:clap:
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a9fc8yt3kd1 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
This should be on Booksie.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
At risk of sounding stupid; what's Booksie?
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:icona9fc8yt3kd1:
a9fc8yt3kd1 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
www.booksie.com It's a website for posting writing and poetry.
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:iconconnorswift:
ConnorSwift Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hell, its better than anything i've written!
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thanks! But I'm sure that's not true! :)
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:iconconnorswift:
ConnorSwift Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well hey! check out the few poems i have and compare then!
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:iconcopperfrost:
Copperfrost Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student General Artist
I absolutely love this piece ;3;
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; glad you liked it! :D
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:iconstickbrush:
StickBrush Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
"Today's friends are tomorrow's enemies" The Boss
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting. :)
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:iconstickbrush:
StickBrush Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
I know another good quotes from the same place

"A name has no value on the battlefield. After a week, no one has a name" -Snake
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:iconlektadea:
Lektadea Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
I never read text pieces on dev, ever. But i love rhymes and read the top part of yours and its just amazing, i love it ;-;
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much! :D
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:iconflyingcatsandglitter:
FlyingCatsandGlitter Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Very beautiful poem that starts and ends strong, leaving an impact to the viewer :)
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I wasn't too sure about the last stanza, so it's nice to know you think it ends strong.

Thanks! :D
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:iconinsanelysweet:
InsanelySweet Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
It's powerful! When i read it the power of the words come out and them make me feel strong
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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:iconflowercalledhope:
FlowerCalledHope Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
It's a great poem
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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BreadKittyIsTheOne27 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
i like this, its very good
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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sarcastic-Assassin Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012   Photographer
"Don't ask me to smile, when you've made me frown."

I can't get away from this line. Believe me, I've tried.

But you've done wonders with this work, wording it precisely. And maybe I'm feeling a little more depressed today than I thought I was, but instead of feeling the hope that I can see should be shining through from this, all I can seem to think about is how I still have to smile, even though I don't feel up to it. I still have keep the other people happy, because it's the right thing to do and I would feel worse if I did anything less.

Thank you for sharing, you happened to make my evening a little more bright.
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.

I see what you're saying but sometimes, you just have to make yourself happy regardless of what others want. I mean, if we all went around trying to please everyone other than ourselves all the time, then would anyone ever be truly happy?

I'm glad this brightened your evening a little. :)


Thanks for taking the time to comment! :D
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Gravity-bolt Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is just like my parents -_-
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