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If I wasn't me and you weren't you,
We wouldn't be us,
And maybe I could love you.
If the sun wasn't bright and the sea weren't blue,
Life wouldn't be this,
And maybe lies could be true.
If plenty was enough and too much wasn't few,
Empty wouldn't be full,
And rather falling I'd have flew.
But instead I fell,
I fell hard for you.

No not you;
I fell for something true,
But that's a lie, as here I do too;
I lie on the floor and cry, cry for you.
I want the light but you're the dark,
I'm the owl but I was born a lark,
I'm just some paradox, dead and stark;
Lying on the floor and crying, crying in the dark.
I fell for a lie too good to be true,
That's the story;
That's me and you.

I want to be angry,
Really I do;
But to hate you is to hate us,
And together we will fall.
I can't fall again,
Break my bones,
My heart,
Again.
I can't not do this again,
Lift my hopes,
My heart,
Again.
But to fly is to fall,
When you're my wings
I know I will fall.
But I can't not try at all.

I don't want you;
I want us to be true.
But we're a lie,
A lie too stark, a lie in the dark;
A lie too honest to be true.
The difference between you and us
Is like lies and truth;
One's beautiful and one's ugly.
But which one is you?

If I wasn't me and you weren't you,
We wouldn't be us,
And maybe I could love you.
If the sun wasn't bright and the sea weren't blue,
Life wouldn't be this,
And maybe lies could be true.
If plenty was enough and too much wasn't few,
Empty wouldn't be full,
And rather falling I'd have flew;
But instead I fell,
I fell hard for you.

We're like lies and truth;
One's beautiful and one's ugly.
But which one is you?

We are lies and truth,
Lies and truth;
Without lies, what is truth?
What is truth?
What is truth?

One's beautiful and one's ugly.
But which one is you?

I want lies.
:iconcorporaterockwhore:
This is what happens when I start thinking too much and am a little too bored. I know it isn’t great and probably doesn’t make a whole lot of sense to anybody other than my twisted self, but I sincerely hope you like it. It was kinda meant to be a song, but that side of things failed when I decided to throw any sort of structure/consistent rhythm away. Oh well. Please let me know what you think! :)
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I really like this! I agree with the comment below me that this would make a nice song. You're band should do that!
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*CorporateRockWhore Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D :D :D
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*CarlaTovar Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I think this would be very nice as a song! (: maybe with some fixing with the rythm but I'd like to listen to it with notes : D
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*CorporateRockWhore Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I know that the rhythm does need quite a bit of work (I suck at that aspect of things, but I've got a friend who I'm in a kind of 'band' with, so I'm hoping she might be able to help me with that. :)
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*CarlaTovar Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Then good luck! (:
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~NinjAPixiEX3 Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah this is great. I felt like, not in a bad way, it kept losing me, but it just made perfect sense at the same time. It's really nice.
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*CorporateRockWhore Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :hug:
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Mood: Wow! *Rambling-anthology Sep 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Definitely need the right mindset to read this, but it made perfect sense to me! I love it...
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*CorporateRockWhore Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm glad it made sense! :D
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Mood: Love ~cechapman95 Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really, really good. I really like it. I think it makes plenty of sense if you look at it the right way, or have the right kind of mind. I suppose I have that kind of mind, then, since it makes perfect sense to me. Or maybe I understand it because I have experienced something similar to what happened to the speaker in this poem/song. I think the places where it lacks rhythm add emphasis to the message and a discordant note that falls in line with human emotion. Great work!
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