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I won't let a razor blade
Take away this life I've made.

I won't let the shame and guilt
Ruin everything I've built.

I won't let being wrong
Stop me from being strong.

I won't let sorrow and pain
Resurrect the demons that I've slain.

I won't let ugly spite
Tell me that I'm not right.

I won't let the dark past
Make my endless hurt last.

I won't let this noose
Leave me hanging loose.

I won't let the world win;
My life is only just about to begin.
Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think :)
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The piece's focus was wonderful. I really enjoyed it. It was very moving and your words choices were simple but they got your message across perfectly and in a way that anyone could relate to. My beliefs about suicide are reflected spot-on in this, I believe you shouldn't let the world win. You are a one-person army against anyone and everyone who has ever tried to cut you down, hope fully you have family and close friends there to stand behind you and fight for you when they need to. Nobody should be shamed for being "different" and your piece conveys that clearly. It's a simple piece, but it's very deep and moving and I truly enjoyed it.
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
The critique was spot on!!!!  You are a brave, beautiful person, very strong and very special!!!Love Hug 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :glomp:
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
;) (Wink) 
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I-LOVE-ZOMBIES99 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
i just started reading a couple of your poems, and.. well. i love your writing. also i can relate to a lot of the themes in your poems... thanks for writing these, like seriously, its a great lift up
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distantspark Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
I love your poetry. Life knocks me down so much that I often fear I won't be able to get up. Your poetry always ends in a positive tone and it really helps my perspective that life is worth the hardships because it will get up. You are so strong because you won't let the world keep you down forever, and I admire that.Thank you for your poetry!
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Matreon Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Just wow. That is beautiful! This has given me the strength to fight another day! It has made me realizes that my life is worth living. That it is not my turn to die. Thank you! Thank you!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Jesus, thank you very, very much. :icontardglompplz:
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jasmine3238187 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
This is so breathtakingly beautiful. Normally, I don't read poetry because of the extreme negativity that is all ways being written today, but you my friend are a genius. Despite the writing itself this has truly helped me realize that giving in isn't worth it. Thank you.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you very, very much. I'm so glad that this could help you. :hug:
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Savannah-Morris Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist
.... I personaly don't like it. Too melodramatic and cliché.
Sounds like a self help book.
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