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I won't let a razor blade
Take away this life I've made.

I won't let the shame and guilt
Ruin everything I've built.

I won't let being wrong
Stop me from being strong.

I won't let sorrow and pain
Resurrect the demons that I've slain.

I won't let ugly spite
Tell me that I'm not right.

I won't let the dark past
Make my endless hurt last.

I won't let this noose
Leave me hanging loose.

I won't let the world win;
My life is only just about to begin.
Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think :)
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The piece's focus was wonderful. I really enjoyed it. It was very moving and your words choices were simple but they got your message across perfectly and in a way that anyone could relate to. My beliefs about suicide are reflected spot-on in this, I believe you shouldn't let the world win. You are a one-person army against anyone and everyone who has ever tried to cut you down, hope fully you have family and close friends there to stand behind you and fight for you when they need to. Nobody should be shamed for being "different" and your piece conveys that clearly. It's a simple piece, but it's very deep and moving and I truly enjoyed it.
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
The critique was spot on!!!!  You are a brave, beautiful person, very strong and very special!!!Love Hug 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :glomp:
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014
;) (Wink) 
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I-LOVE-ZOMBIES99 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
i just started reading a couple of your poems, and.. well. i love your writing. also i can relate to a lot of the themes in your poems... thanks for writing these, like seriously, its a great lift up
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distantspark Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013
I love your poetry. Life knocks me down so much that I often fear I won't be able to get up. Your poetry always ends in a positive tone and it really helps my perspective that life is worth the hardships because it will get up. You are so strong because you won't let the world keep you down forever, and I admire that.Thank you for your poetry!
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Matreon Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Just wow. That is beautiful! This has given me the strength to fight another day! It has made me realizes that my life is worth living. That it is not my turn to die. Thank you! Thank you!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Jesus, thank you very, very much. :icontardglompplz:
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jasmine3238187 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013
This is so breathtakingly beautiful. Normally, I don't read poetry because of the extreme negativity that is all ways being written today, but you my friend are a genius. Despite the writing itself this has truly helped me realize that giving in isn't worth it. Thank you.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you very, very much. I'm so glad that this could help you. :hug:
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Savannah-Morris Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist
.... I personaly don't like it. Too melodramatic and cliché.
Sounds like a self help book.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough. I respect your opinion.

Thanks for taking the time to comment :)
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Savannah-Morris Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist
No problem ^^
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pantant Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
neat
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)
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pantant Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013
your welcome
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AriannaTheKeybearer Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful piece of writing, very simple rhyming and word usage but the purpose is clear. A lot of people struggle with this, myself included.

I'm struggling myself because along with taking a lot of wear and tear from people with a smile because I said to myself as long as I'm with my friends, I can take the abuse, but only when I started to see the scars I had to pull away from that belief because of how it was damaging me. Because of this, I'm struggling to see why I keep holding on but this poem defines the reason to, nothing to me is sadder than seeing a budding life suddenly extinguished by a unjust source of silencing death, and while I'm struggling to give myself the same perception, I'm still trying. <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! :)

Keep trying and never give up. People who are abuse you in any way, shape or form to not have the right or privilege to be called your 'friend'. :hug:
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AriannaTheKeybearer Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
-hugs- <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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imaebyjune Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Recently, I've been feeling a bit down. Thanks for posting this; it cheered me up! :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am so glad this cheered you up! :hug:
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Into-Oblivion97 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This goes right to the heart. As a child I once swore an oath to myself that I would never let anyone or anything break me. And thought it seemed hard at times, I ultimately managed to keep it. And now I stand here, and my life truly is about to begin, finally. And I look back and I feel so happy that I did not let them ruin this bright future for me.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well done for keeping that oath; no matter how hard it gets we should never let anything break us!

:hug:
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NinjaFoxsBuddy Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This pretty sums up my attitude the majority of the time~ :heart:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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NinjaFoxsBuddy Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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adorkable-mandie Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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akai-yari Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your poem is absolutely beautiful ! Whispered words of courage, they express fear and strength at the same time. It's absolutely stunning.

It's so beautiful that I'm at a loss for words :wow:.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

Aw, thanks for leaving such a sweet comment! :hug:
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VivaFariy Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Amazing! I love the rhythm, the words, the great rhyme.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, glad you liked it! :)
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AntoinetteDelacour Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. It is very strong, honest, and thruthful. I've gone through this myself, and know that it is a difficult, evergoing battle. Good for you for you for keeping strong.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much. :hug:
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Animefox52 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amen.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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SydneyA Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. Great writing :thumbsup:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you! :hug:
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Ali-Bear44 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
This is absolutely amazing!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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Ali-Bear44 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
:D
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love it, lovely. It was amazing. I hope life's getting better! :huggle:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm so glad you like it! :hug:
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:] :hug: Of course I like it, everything you do is amazing!
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CarlynnRose Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is BEAUTIFUL.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you very much! :hug:
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CarlynnRose Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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