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I'd write a love song
But I've never really been in love,
Apart from with that girl and that guy
On that day I nearly touched the sky.

I like my best friend.
And it hurts like hell,
Yeah, it hurts like hell
Knowing I can't ever tell
Cos I'm me
And he's a she.
Just an idea for some lyrics I was toying with. I might add onto this, I might not. Please note that this isn't about me, it's just an idea I had.

Please let me know what you think. :)
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megthebest Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
this is me, i date guys so she wont see who i really am
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BlackSheep6 Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's strong and emotional and the very last line is brilliant beyond words. ♥
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CorporateRockWhore Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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LalalandMuse Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this poem. It gets the feeling of pain and longing across, and it was nicely written.
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:iconkatgopur:
this is really good, and out of curiosity, what sort of music would you put it to? cause I can feel like a linkin park rap rock sorta thing to it
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CorporateRockWhore Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I was thinking of kinda putting it to some kind of punk, power-chord type music. But I can definitely see it working with a rap/rock sorta tune.

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noodlenini Apr 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I really like this a lot
I think it's good a good flow to it, I especially love the third and fourth line<3
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CorporateRockWhore Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm really glad that you liked it! :D
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Katie-Venerelli Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazingly fabulous!<33
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