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I'm covered in fireflies;
All up and down my legs.
They sleep in my skin
And hide my sin,
My precious red fireflies.

They ignite my body
And set it ablaze.
They turn all of my pain
Into a crimson haze,
My precious red fireflies.

They burn through flesh
In a criss-cross mesh
And spread their wings
All over me,
My precious red fireflies.

They hum silently,
Painfully,
Whispering away my shame.
They burn brightly,
Painfully,
Setting my blood aflame,
My precious red fireflies.

I hate them but they love me
But nobody can ever see
Because they refuse to leave.
Not that I want them to;
Because they care,
They understand
More than you ever could do,
My precious red fireflies.

They want me to die,
To jump, to fly.
They want to own me.
They want to set me free
And make it so it can be
Just me
And my precious red fireflies.
I'm not sure if this really makes any sense. The "fireflies" are supposed to be a metaphor, if that helps.

Please let me know what you think. :)
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tylerp1991 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ey cool poem
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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tylerp1991 Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yep
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NinjAPixiEX3 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awesommeeee.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Darling, I felt like this was in secret code for those who understand. I hope you doing okay, lovely! You can talk to me whenever you like if you'd like to.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess, in a way, it kinda was.

Thank you. :hug:
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:iconkatie-venerelli:
Katie-Venerelli Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D You're welcome, lovely. :hug: <33
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CheeseLovingChester Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful, and I completely understand.
I hope you're alright <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. And I'm getting by. :hug:
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MaiaCarlson Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love the vibrant rhythm, and how abstract it is! I'm not sure if there is a name for the rhyming pattern you used, but is very much liked it :happybounce:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm glad you liked the rhyming pattern! :D
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franramis Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
So simple and beautiful! <3
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :)
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HalfFullMoon Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
Wow! Amazing imagery.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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Shaderovi Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist
Wow... this reminds me of something I tried and (failed) to write the other day. You're my favorite poem writer, Coldkid. You really are. :icondragonweepplz:
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:iconcorporaterockwhore:
CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very much; that really means a lot to me! :hug:
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BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
*whine*

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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Huh? :)
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BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You give me feels, Ellora Sutton, you really do.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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BittersweetWanderer Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Fanks
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jet7ST Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
Damn. Just damn. This is really good. I found myself speaking along.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much; I'm glad you think it's alright! :D
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jet7ST Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
Yeah, it was... Yeah. Just some seriously good imagery. Loved the repetition too. Oh my Gosh, You're icon is totoro! I didn't notice that before! AAAAhhh! I love it.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:icontardglompplz:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013   Writer
At first I thought that the fireflies were a metaphor for scars caused by self harm, but you threw me at:
But nobody can ever see
Because they refuse to leave.
Because if they refuse to leave how can nobody see them?
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They are a metaphor for self-harm, but the part about them refusing to leave is meant to represent the idea of self-harm always being there in the back of your mind, always knowing that you did do it. The idea of 'nobody can ever see' is meant to represent a fear of other people finding out. If that makes any kind of sense. :)
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013   Writer
It does make sense, but it's just confusing a bit
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