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Cold words on my mind
Like grey waves tasting a beach
Washing me away.
A crappy two AM first attempt at a haiku; I apologise. Please tell me if the syllable count is wrong! :)
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cattservant Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
... where there is motion
there is life...
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TheresNoSuchThing24 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist
I can't believe this is a first attempt (Though I am a firm believer that some people's best work is produced in the early hours of the morning) at haiku, it's very...poignant... 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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Pseudonym-chan Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can't believe you could do this at two am! It's hard to make a haiku stand out, but you definitely do that in this one :D
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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Pseudonym-chan Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D
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AuthorKatieOlson Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Student Writer
I think the last line really hit home for me. Great job! I'm terrible at haikus myself. ^^; 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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AuthorKatieOlson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Student Writer
You are welcome! :hug: 
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Lyrically-Sadistic Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You suck. Please die in a fire.













































Just kidding, I love you. Excellent haiku, CorporateRoxzorzmyboxorz.:iconyourockplz::iconthumbsup2plz:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you! :)
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russellcattle Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Syllable count is fine.

Nice haiku, but whenever I heard the word "haiku", I reflexively reply, "Gesundheit!"

I think it must be the result of a post-hypnotic suggestion someone planted in me.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :)

Haha. 
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SubliMinimal1 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
I feel your pain. I was the epitome of being bullied growing up, note that this was when AIM was popular and online bulling was just starting up. I was verbally abused and beat up after school. The schools could do nothing about it at the time, because it was out of their "jurisdiction" for lack of a better term. Thank God for my father, "Start swinging and don't stop. Fuck the school and the consequences." he old me. And that is exactly what I did. You may question my fathers parenting skills, but I will tell you this much.. No one Fucked with me after I set my fear aside.

*Just remember, they're only a temporary part of your life.
Keep Your Head Up.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry that so many people were so horrible to you. Whilst normally I don't condone violence, I once used a similar tactic. These boys used to pick on me incessantly for being 'emo'. Their leader shoved and punched me once, so I punched him back. For the most part, they left me alone after that. 

Thank you :)
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lovemondotrasho Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haikus are my favorite because, when done correctly, they are incredibly meaningful and usually resonate pretty well with the general public.  The image you have created with this haiku is vivid and something I did not expect from the title, though it makes more sense than any other analogy that could have been used.  

Fantastic job! 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much! :glomp:
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
This is REALLY good.
Wow. Awesome
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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CynicallyBelieveIt Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
It's so simple, and yet so meaningful.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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Vallestin Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So true 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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flamingodancer123 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
You got the count right and got the words perfectly!!!
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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Caitlynanne Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Truth! 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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ElectricViolet52 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
I used to get bullied a lot in primary school - so this is perfect to describe how I felt. Now, thank God, they know not to mess with me. Oh, and I love haikus (even though they're annoyingly hard to write). 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you don't get bullied anymore; it's a really horrible thing to have to deal with. :hug:
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ElectricViolet52 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
Thanks, and I protected my younger sister so at least she didn't have to suffer. God, I love my sister! Love 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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ElectricViolet52 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
Bunny Emoji-66 (Thank you arigatou) [V3]  Thank you, great master of poetry :) (Smile) 
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StormyRoyalz Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Your work is great.never doubt your work
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :hug:
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StormyRoyalz Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Student General Artist
Your welcome :hug:
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StarscreamSkydancer Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No, your syllable count is right.

And its not crappy. Haikus are friggin hard to write.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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StarscreamSkydancer Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
not a problem. Thats what im here for.
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AlansArmy Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
I really like haikus, and this is a good one^^
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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AlansArmy Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
you're welcome :3
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