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There was a lady on telly today,
Talking from a land far away;
Her kid had died,
Torn apart from the inside.

The kid had hung herself in the family bathroom.

The lady was crying,
You could hear her heart dying
And mine did too.

I could've been that kid,
What with all the things I did
And my family could've been her;
Left with nothing but despair.

I envy the kid
For doing what she did.
I thank the kid,
Making me think about what I nearly did.
I mourn the kid,
Gone because of what others did.

Don't ever think you wouldn't be missed,
Because there's always that person
Who'll miss you,
Praying you'll pull through
Until memories of your smile is all they have.
This is based on earlier today when I saw a news story about a teenager in Canada who hung herself. Her mother was absolutely heartbroken and I guess it really made me think.

Thank you very much for reading and please let me know what you think. :)
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You had a great idea and I love how you took it. i love to see dark and sad poetry, it's one of my favorite kinds.

I can feel the emotion in this poem and you did good at releasing it. it's good to see how far you can go with a sad subject.

I liked your writing style and the way you sat this poem up, keep up the good work.

I believe this poem will impact a lot of your readers. A strong poem can go very far, and i wish you the best of luck at what you do.
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This poem- l so many of yours- tells us the truth. If you kill yourself, someone WILL miss you, even if you think no one will or no one needs you. I think this will impact a lot of people and make them rethink their decisions. I just wish my friend had been able to read this. She could have used it.

Back to the original subject, I like the way you write. Your writings hit issues that are big now. Many kids are feeling like committing suicide and a lot of them go through with it and succeed.

I love it.
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I love all of your poems, but this one brought tears to my eyes.

To me suicide is something that seems so far away, something that you don't think much about it until it hits you right in the face. You make people think and that's awesome.

Love your work, keep going and stay strong. 
CorporateRockWhore 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm really glad you like my work :hug:
BerriesAre Apr 11, 2014  New member Hobbyist Artist
The last verse brought tears to my eyes. :iconwahhplz:
CorporateRockWhore 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
TheQueenOfSugarRush Apr 3, 2014  Student General Artist
That last line really struck me hard. QAQ
The11thNightfall Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So very true… I can truly relate to this.
The11thNightfall Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
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