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If you cut you'll bleed
If you bleed you'll die
If you're sad you'll smile
And if you smile it's a lie

If you lie you'll live
If you live you'll die
If you cheat you'll win
And if you win you'll cry

If you cry you'll lose
If you lose you'll die
If you run you'll stay
And if you stay you'll fly

If you fly you'll fall
If you fall you'll die
'Cause no-one will catch you
If your life is a lie.
Just a little poem I wrote whilst procrastinating.

Thanks for reading and please let me know what you think/how to improve. :)
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unaveragejo3 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Writer
This should have been the lullaby my mom sung me when I was little. XD
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AshFitzpatrick Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student Writer
All of your writing is so graceful, and it all rings true to my personal experiences which I haven't been able to put into words before. Your way with words is beautiful
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you very, very much :glomp:
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jessie0wessie Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just rediscovered this in a search, have to say, it's still awesome
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ElectricViolet52 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
I'm jealous! How come you get to write such good poems...? Neko Emoji-14 (Cry) [V1] 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you very much! :hug:
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ElectricViolet52 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
No, prob, I haven't commented on the sweet poem about your sister (if she isn't, sorry!) yet, but it's one of my favourites! My sister used to be cute and innocent, but now she's a completely kid altogether...oh, and don't feel like you're weird, I'm bff's with a cat, a forget-me-not plant and two imaginary friends. Strange world, huh?
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Pseudonym-chan Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Woaaaaaaah that was awesome :D
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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Pseudonym-chan Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :D Your poetry is amazing
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Sakura-Yotobari Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, you are such an amazing artist, you must have a very beautiful mind! 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :hug:
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zasexydarkangel Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is so awesome. i love it.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks; glad you liked it! :D
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Kattua Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow! I love it!
Well, this might sound weird, but do you mind if i use this to an essay for school? Only the teacher will be reading it ;)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Glad you liked it! :D

It would be fine if you used it; I think it's really cool that you want to! :)
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meimeiawesome Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely! i love that last stanza. :) 
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :)
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RapidashLove Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Duuuuuuude. I was going to say something profound, but you beat me to it.
You are GREAT. This would be great to read out loud. Almost monotonous, but it grabs your attention in a great way, and gets your mind whirring.
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ArtesArcana Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(My first comment in DeviantART :D )
This is really beautiful, congratulations!
I love the composition and the meaning that I see behind the words ^-^
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(Welcome to dA! :hug:)

Aw, thank you very, very much! :glomp:
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zoeythara Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: wow this is cool I love it ^^ great work :love:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm glad you liked it! :D
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zoeythara Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: ^^
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JoKuLFrOsTiGuArDiAn Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
u.just.described. my.life. thank you for putting it so beautifully
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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JoKuLFrOsTiGuArDiAn Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks.
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
Kind of sad that that's the way it all works out in the end. Especially since any of us who are 'different' kind of HAVE to lie to 'fit in' with society. It's always a lose lose situation.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It is. I think it's because a lot of people are scared of others who are 'different' due to a kind of fear of the unknown.
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
To true, to true. People always fear that which is unknown, however how can you get over that fear? Learn about the unknown so it becomes known. Most people don't grasp that concept.
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fallenlover72 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
This is really good. I think, from someone who reads poetry aloud for competitions, that while this is a really strong poem with the a to b, b to c, c to d, ect, if you use some punctuation, just to direct the rhythm and flow of how you read it. You probably chose to not use any punctuation in this poem, but each mark has its use. :)
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.

I am currently experimenting with the use of punctuation in poetry (if that makes sense?), so your comment has been extremely helpful. Thanks! :)
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fallenlover72 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013
I get that :) I like to play around with the absence of all punctuation, the overuse of it, or new uses for it. I just really love punctuation d:
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student Writer
I really love this, I don't know why, especially the first half, I would like to see this poem in a slam poetry reading. I think you would be a great slam poet.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I'm really pleased that you liked it! :hug:
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
No problem :3
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XxDmitriaxX Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Freaking amazing.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :D
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XxDmitriaxX Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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LarcenTyler Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
I like it actually. It's a very unique theme.
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :)
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DatMofoWaffle Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
wow, amazing poem. Kinda describes how I feel a lot of the time D:
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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DatMofoWaffle Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
no problem ;D
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VeiliedMaiden Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
Wow
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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VeiliedMaiden Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013
:)
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BigTuna723 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012
Quite excallent
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CorporateRockWhore Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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