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It's not my fault that I can't control myself,
I can't help it that I fell to the dark.
But please, give me yet another chance;
Let me reignite my inner spark.

I understand if you want to give me up,
I know it's the least I deserve.
But please, at least let me try;
I have an honour to preserve.

I'll take the pills for you, my friends,
So that I'm less of a trouble.
But please, know this now, no mistake;
You can't rebuild my rubble.

I'm the crazy electric one with fire inside,
I won't ever give that up.
But please, don't make me not change;
I need help and I'm not ashamed to admit it.
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This is the first thing I've written in weeks and, reading over this, my lack of practice really shows. Sorry this sucks more than my usual works, but I really wanted/needed to get this out.

Please let me know what you think. :)
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~RebbieChan Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
After not writing fora while I tend to find it hard to find my "writer's voice" again too, but this is definitely better than you think. The only iffy part is the last section was worded a bit off, like I had to re-read it to understand what it said. Aside from that it was really good!^^

I like the theme too, you do not have to change who you are to get better, no one is going to change you, they're going to help you. Sounds like a very good step in the right direction! :D
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*CorporateRockWhore Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! Sorry about that last section, I do have a tendency to make things more than a little confusing/tricky to understand.

Thanks again! :D
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~RebbieChan Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lol I do that too.
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~Felicia-Neko Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know the feeling..nicely written :)
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*CorporateRockWhore Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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~isasongs Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think this is a very good piece
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*CorporateRockWhore Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :D
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~isasongs Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
And please feel free to check out some of my work as well ;)
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~KarmaKid94 Jul 3, 2012  Student Writer
You shouldn't be ashamed. We're not asking you to change, honey. We're just asking you to try to be happy. If you can't do that, we'll be here just the same.
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*CorporateRockWhore Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's kinda hard not to be ashamed sometimes, especially when your sleeves ride up and strangers stare at you like you're a fucking psycho. I will try my best to be a happier person, I do feel better already knowing that you're here and that my family are willing to help me. :)
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